[stylist] Revised part of chapter 5

[James Canaday M.A. N6YR]

Helene,
"what they did together" and "how much she loved her dragon" is very 
vague.  it leaves room for a nonsexual interpretation, that may be 
just fine for your plot anyway.
jc
Jim Canaday M.A.
Lawrence, KS

At 08:54 PM 9/9/2009, you wrote:
>I've now deleted the part in chapter 5 that I think offended people
>(Judith anyway) so now the paragraph just reads:
>
>"One girl tried to show her more tolerance, but she freaked out when
>Liza started talking about how much she loved her dragon, and what
>they did together.    (I think it was that kind of talk that persuaded
>Arielle to bring Liza back to us in the first place)."
>
>I hope that's better and people carry on wanting to read it.
>
>Helene
>
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