[stylist] Revised part of chapter 5

[helene ryles]

Jim: I want to drop hints that something rather unwholesome is taking
place, but I don't want to go into any details on this subject.

Helene

On 10/09/2009, James Canaday M.A.  N6YR <n6yr at sunflower.com> wrote:
> Helene,
> "what they did together" and "how much she loved her dragon" is very
> vague.  it leaves room for a nonsexual interpretation, that may be
> just fine for your plot anyway.
> jc
> Jim Canaday M.A.
> Lawrence, KS
>
> At 08:54 PM 9/9/2009, you wrote:
>>I've now deleted the part in chapter 5 that I think offended people
>>(Judith anyway) so now the paragraph just reads:
>>
>>"One girl tried to show her more tolerance, but she freaked out when
>>Liza started talking about how much she loved her dragon, and what
>>they did together.    (I think it was that kind of talk that persuaded
>>Arielle to bring Liza back to us in the first place)."
>>
>>I hope that's better and people carry on wanting to read it.
>>
>>Helene
>>
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