[stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)

[Barbara Hammel]

I wonder if you could leave chapter one where it is and then switch the 
others so they go in chronological order to catch up with where chapter one 
is and then continue on.  I noticed where you also reverse a couple of 
months later.  Maybe once we see the whole thing we'll figure out why you've 
done this way, but right now it is too confusing to keep jumping around and 
seeing Nadia at different ages.
Barbara

If wisdom's ways you wisely seek, five things observe with care:  of whom 
you speak, to whom you speak, and how and when and where.

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From: "Judith Bron" <jbron at optonline.net>
Sent: Wednesday, September 16, 2009 6:21 PM
To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)

> Keep in mind that most readers of your book will not read time lines 
> before starting their read.  The plot has to be clear without explanation 
> to the average reader.  People read novels to be entertained. 
> Consequently they are not going to put in the time necessary to figure out 
> what the entertainment is all about.  Judith
> ----- Original Message ----- 
> From: "helene ryles" <dreamavdb at googlemail.com>
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> Sent: Wednesday, September 16, 2009 6:11 PM
> Subject: Re: [stylist] DBG 7 (completely new chapter)
>
>
>> Shelley: I'm glad you like this story so far. Thanks very much for
>> your feedback.
>> I've sent a timeline of the date each chapter takes place.
>> Let me know if it helps any?
>> I'm also planning to make a list of all the characters.
>>
>> Also I mean to have a glossary of terms at the end of the book. I read
>> a book that had one which was set in Afganistan called 'the
>> breadwinner'. I found it a really good book. The names of things that
>> didnt have english translation was at the end of the book.
>>
>> I'm wondering if people think Nadir and Nadia are differant? The only
>> really new character is Mr Murat as Nadia and her mom have been writen
>> about before.
>>
>> The story is about Nadia's life and also that of her aunt Liza. who
>> are the main characters.
>>
>> Sorry about the grammar. Grammar and spelling isn't my strong point. I
>> do run it through the spell check when I've findished chapters or you
>> would find even more badly spelt words. Unfortunately the spell check
>> just gives you a list of words to use and I sometimes accidently use
>> the wrong one.
>>
>> Arielle is Liza's aunt and has been mentioned breifly in chapter 3.
>> Mr Murrat's aunt Nora doesn't come into it. Would it be less confusing
>> if he just called her his aunt?
>> The painful curse is the same as Crusendi curse that J K rowling used
>> only I call it 'the painful curse.
>>
>> Helene
>>
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