[stylist] seeking feedback

[LoriStay at aol.com]

I'll offer a few comments, but today is a busy day, so it will be limited.  
 Read on.
In a message dated 9/18/09 1:30:55 AM, timber_wolf899 at yahoo.com writes:


> hand full
> 

The spelling for this is h a n d f u l.

 Edi faces
What are Edi faces?   Do you mean eddy?   (e d d y)

Why is the sky pink?   Is it a dawn sky?   Or are we on another world?

straitened
I think the word you want is straightened:   s t r a i g h t e n e d

fort ht he
Need a little proofing here

 shimmered and shown
Shown?   Or Shone:   S h o n e

your writing is elegant.   Keep it up!
Lori