[stylist] Angels Light Chapter One
helene ryles
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Sat Sep 19 17:38:34 UTC 2009
Interesting. I like Vampire stories.
Helene
On 19/09/2009, kec92 at ourlink.net <kec92 at ourlink.net> wrote:
>
> Hi everyone,
>
> I've been staarting to writting a book myself. I would like some
> feed back to see what I need to improve and what's good as it is. If
> you could help me, that would be greatly appreciated. Thank you,
>
> Keitei Colton
> Part One
>
> Night
>
> A night that's filled with despair,
>
> so deep that no hope is possible.
>
> So far flung that it seems
>
> An impossibility that it will be found,
>
> Total despair takes over,
>
> Until we are fed up with grief and rage,
>
> Rage for the light to return.
>
> But the hope never will.
>
> The rage only creates sparks,
>
> Until no emotion can be felt.
>
> Finally content with the world,
>
> The light starts to return,
>
> There's hope once again.
>
> Chapter One
>
> The End
>
> Fear filled the night: the night was supposed to be peaceful, until
> the mayhem ensued. Some people would live on in the village of
> Potevka in the morning, and others would not. The life of one
> sixteen-year-old boy would change forever.
>
> Quick breath, pounding heart, and adrenaline rushing through his
> body, Angelus pushed his body harder and faster. The fear of what
> was behind him was overwhelmingly Terrifying.
>
> The snow was lightly falling on this Christmas night. The streets
> were quiet and filled with a little bit of snow. Angelus burst out
> of his house running. He had He had no idea where the monster was,
> but he only wished that his angel would save him.
>
> This angel of his was different from the ones painted in the
> pictures.
>
> She was tall with a slight tan. Her long blackish-brown hair reached
> to the backs of her knees. She wore black leggings, a fur shirt and a
> corn stalk cap. There was something primative about her that Angelus
> couldn't explain. Nameless, she stood for him around the corner.
>
> A blast of wind and snow shot angelus in the face. When he could
> open his eyes again, she was gone. It was just and allusion, he had
> to keep running, running, running... He would have to forget why his
> angel disappeared on him. He had to forget that he would die soon.
> All that he would be able to remember was his name and the languages
> that he spoke to keep himself alive. The winters here were harsh.
>
> He shivered as he ran in his woolen night gown. He needed to wait,
> or run. He couldn't wait until the sun rose above the horizon. That
> would be a while. The sun had just set a couple of hours ago.
>
> Looking over his shoulder, Angelus checked to see if he was being
> followed. His breath caught as he saw a silhouette of a figure
> behind him, coming up fast.
>
> Something made Angelus stumble and fall headlong onto a cobble stone
> street. Blood filled his mouth. Struggling not to scream and cry out
> in pain, and fear for his life, he didn't want others to share his
> fate. He pushed himself onto his back. The monster was on top of
> him, teeth bared, growling hungrily. The wind blew in gusts. Every
> time the wind picked up, Angelus' hair moved momentarily in front of
> his eyes. His heart picked up speed as it leaned in.
>
> This is it, I'm gonna die, thought Angelus. I'm going to die on
> this most holy of nights.
>
> A grunt brought Angelus' eyes flying open with surprise, wanting to
> know what was going on. He just saw the sky starting to clear up
> above him the twinkling of an occational star, and the walls of the
> houses where he'd fallen. He pushed himself up on his elbows. The
> creature had left him. He knew that his angel wouldn't, no couldn't
> have done that. Was it a trick? Would it come back? Was any of
> this for real?
>
> Their numbers were growing in masses each ay. This place was
> Angelus' last hope of not being in danger. But that frail shell of
> hope had shattered tonight. The world had changed dso completely,
> but very little physically had changed.
>
> The terror was still there, same with the turning of the world. The
> only thing that had changed was that Angelus had survived. He was
> grateful for watever had saved him. When he looked around him, he
> saw that another one of them was there, behind him. A new pang of
> fear shot through angelus. But when he opened his eyes, he did a
> double take. It was his Angel!
>
> "How did you find me? Did you save me from that monster?" Angelus
> demanded excittedly of his angel.
>
> "I am one of those you fear: but I will never hurt you," she said in
> a soft sigh that sounded off, like she wasn't a native speaker. She
> walked past him. Her movements were flowing into one another.
>
> "Wait! Angelus cried in desperation. "Don't leave me!" Hysteria
> was shaking his body.
>
> "Are you not afraid of a monster like me? she with wariness, almost
> dead, in her tone.
>
> "No."
>
> "You should be."
>
> "Why?"
>
> Because I'm not the person you are looking for. I am merely just a
> guide."
>
> "You're much more than that to me. I hope every day that I see you
> again. I am in much agony when you are gone."
>
> "I am a wanderer, a nomad of sorts: I never stay in one place for
> very long."
>
> "But you've been here for a generation, watching over us."
>
> "That's because I've been waiting for you, little dreamer."
>
> "Why?"
>
> "You are different than everybody else."
>
> "I'm not different, nor am I a dreamer."
>
> "Don't do that to yourself. It'll help you look at life."
>
> "Just don't leave."
>
> "I won't leave you, Angelus. Let me help you up." She extended her
> hand, offering the help.
>
> Angelus grasped her glove covered hand and got up.
>
> "I don't think that hyou're a monsterous being," said Angelus
> plainly.
>
> "You don't believe me?" the pretty woman asked.
>
> "That's right. I just can't see you being evil." he told her.
>
> "you shouldn't have said that." She smiled without much energy to
> it.
>
> "How?"
>
> "There is one thing you should know first."
>
> "What?"
>
> "I am a super breed of this monster."
>
> "Huh? I don't understand what you're trying to say to me."
>
> "You will not be able to go back to your family. Cany you accept
> that?"
>
> "Huh?"
>
> "Say goodbye to your old life, and prepare for a new one."
>
> She leaned forward slowly. The features of her face were slightly
> distorted from her lips pulling back over her teeth.
>
> "What are you doing?" Angelus didn't want to hurt the worman, but he
> was confused why she was acting so strange.
>
> The swiftness of her teeth sank into the veins of his neck. The
> venom didn't hurt, but the blood pumping up circulation to his head
> went faster, and dripped onto the snow. The woman laid him down
> gently, sitting down by his head. his conscious faltered and fell
> into blackness that enjulfed so completely. The deed was done, and
> there was no going back.
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