[stylist] FLM Comments

[Barbara Hammel]

Hey, is he ever going to need to talk in length about that incident?  If so, 
make us cry.  I love a book that makes me cry.
Barbara

If wisdom's ways you wisely seek, five things observe with care:  of whom 
you speak, to whom you speak, and how and when and where.

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From: "Shelley J. Alongi" <qobells at roadrunner.com>
Sent: Tuesday, September 22, 2009 1:05 AM
To: "NFBnet Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: [stylist] FLM Comments

> Thanks for all your input so far. I'm glad to see my writing is 
> descriptive enough to make one hungry and keeps you turning the page. I 
> appreciate all the comments. Judith I'm convinced you're my biggest fan. 
> This story is the most conflicted story I've written and so I'm trying out 
> lot of different techniques though it does carry my voice. Thanks for all 
> your words and to Barbara's comments about train engineers being heartless 
> if they don't regret hitting someone, no train engineer I've ever met and 
> that has been few has ever been heartless. One told me it hurts to see 
> people step out in front of a train. Another one wanted counselling. Keep 
> sending comments if you can it helps me refine the craft.
> Shelley J. Alongi
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