[stylist] FLM Comments

[helene ryles]

Hi Shelley,
I wish you the best of luck with this book you are writing. I find
your advice about 'Trials of an honorary dragon' very useful so I'm
sorry I've not made any comments about your story. I read mainly young
children and teenage fiction. I'm afraid I don't read much adult
fiction at all, unless it's a fantasy novel or the main character is
differant in some way.

Helene

On 22/09/2009, Barbara Hammel <poetlori8 at msn.com> wrote:
> Hey, is he ever going to need to talk in length about that incident?  If so,
> make us cry.  I love a book that makes me cry.
> Barbara
>
> If wisdom's ways you wisely seek, five things observe with care:  of whom
> you speak, to whom you speak, and how and when and where.
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> From: "Shelley J. Alongi" <qobells at roadrunner.com>
> Sent: Tuesday, September 22, 2009 1:05 AM
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>> Thanks for all your input so far. I'm glad to see my writing is
>> descriptive enough to make one hungry and keeps you turning the page. I
>> appreciate all the comments. Judith I'm convinced you're my biggest fan.
>> This story is the most conflicted story I've written and so I'm trying out
>>
>> lot of different techniques though it does carry my voice. Thanks for all
>> your words and to Barbara's comments about train engineers being heartless
>>
>> if they don't regret hitting someone, no train engineer I've ever met and
>> that has been few has ever been heartless. One told me it hurts to see
>> people step out in front of a train. Another one wanted counselling. Keep
>> sending comments if you can it helps me refine the craft.
>> Shelley J. Alongi
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>> updated September 13, 2009
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