[stylist] Donna's synopsis revised after Anita's comments

[Donna Hill]

Hi Lori,
Thanks. I found the period followed by a comma, which brings up another 
buggaboo about Spell Check. I did a little experiment which I will post 
under a separate subject line.
Donna

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On 11/6/2010 7:35 PM, loristay wrote:
> This is much better than the first.  I find I was not so confused.  Make sure you have someone check it, proofreading, so you don't have a period followed by a comma, and other unusual typos.
> Lori
> On Nov 6, 2010, at 6:58:42 PM, "Donna Hill"<penatwork at epix.net>  wrote:
>
> From:   "Donna Hill"<penatwork at epix.net>
> Subject:    [stylist] Donna's synopsis revised after Anita's comments
> Date:   November 6, 2010 6:58:42 PM EDT
> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> Hi Anita,
> Thanks for the feedback. That sentence was a bit unwieldy, and I revised 
> the last one. See what you think of this.
> Block quote
>
> 14-year-old refugees Abigail and Baggy live with guardians, while 
> attending an unusual private school in Applebutter Hill., Abigail is a 
> songwriter, who dreams of stardom while dealing with failing eyesight. 
> Baggy is a photographer who likes working with cars and wood. During 
> summer break, they travel in a flying ship disguised as a cloud. As 
> uninvited guests in the Castle of Bar Gundoom, they learn of plans to 
> steal a powerful sapphire from their new school. They escape to Satori 
> Green where giant Chrysanthemums take them to Anbata's Well for 
> guidance. Rutherford, a grumpy acorn, offers to help. Efforts to unravel 
> the mystery bring them face to face with the stone itself and an armed 
> stranger. Abigail's guide dog, Curly Connor, provides clues that uncover 
> the spy. Concern about bullying leads to a secret surveillance plan.
>
> Block quote end
> Thanks,
> Donna
>
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>
> Check out the "Sound in Sight" CD project
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> Performing Arts Division of the National Federation of the Blind:
> www.padnfb.org
>
>
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