[stylist] Writing Sample, (strong language, and some descriptions of sex)

[Joe Orozco]

Chris,

Great thinking!  See, I knew you guys would help me make this lumbering
novel even better than what it currently is.  For anyone interested, I hope
to post the first 10,000 words up on Authonomy.com as soon as I can get
around to making some much-needed revisions.  Thanks again!

Joe

"Hard work spotlights the character of people: some turn up their sleeves,
some turn up their noses, and some don't turn up at all."--Sam Ewing 

-----Original Message-----
From: Chris Kuell [mailto:ckuell at comcast.net] 
Sent: Tuesday, November 16, 2010 12:26 PM
To: jsorozco at gmail.com; Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] Writing Sample, (strong language,and 
some descriptions of sex)

Joe,

I found this engaging and was disappointed when it ended so 
abruptly. Nice 
work. I might suggest a little more details about 
setting--noises, clatter, 
smells of fried foods, maybe a detail about an earring or new 
beard Angel is 
sporting. Not too much, just a sprinkling. I think of good fiction as a 
three-legged stool: plot, character and setting.
You might also consider substituting "cojones"(pronounced 
cahoonas, for JAWS 
users)  for balls, as your dialogue is Latino.

Thanks for sharing.

chris