[stylist] question about word usage

[Justin Williams]

There are two people naned jenifer in the passage.  I was just a little
confused, but otherwise, it was good and suspensevull.  I would love to read
more. 

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Behalf Of Judith Bron
Sent: Thursday, October 14, 2010 8:37 PM
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Subject: [stylist] question about word usage

Here is a section from my novel "The Letter."  I use the phrase "Totally
spooked" and wonder if there is something more appropriate that I should be
using.  Any help would be most appreciated.  Thanks, Judith  

On her way to the car Sheila thought about the little book with an inserted
paper delivered a few months earlier by a strange man.  He had said, "Mrs.
Hamilton, I'm a lawyer representing a family that perished in the holocaust.
This little packet containing a small book and paper were given to me to
deliver to you for Jennifer Rabinowitz.  They are left by her parents.  It
should be presented to her on her seventeenth birthday.  Please don't tell
Jennifer or your husband about this meeting.  A good day to you."  The man
left the house and she ran to the front window to watch him drive away.  But
no car appeared on the driveway or street.  There was no man walking away
from the house.  Totally spooked, she ran to her bedroom without looking at
the little packet and placed it with other papers in her dresser.  
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