[stylist] question about word usage

[Judith Bron]

Justin, there is only one character named Jennifer.  What do you feel about 
the word spooked?  Judith
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From: "Justin Williams" <justin.williams2 at gmail.com>
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> There are two people naned jenifer in the passage.  I was just a little
> confused, but otherwise, it was good and suspensevull.  I would love to 
> read
> more.
>
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> Behalf Of Judith Bron
> Sent: Thursday, October 14, 2010 8:37 PM
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> Subject: [stylist] question about word usage
>
> Here is a section from my novel "The Letter."  I use the phrase "Totally
> spooked" and wonder if there is something more appropriate that I should 
> be
> using.  Any help would be most appreciated.  Thanks, Judith
>
> On her way to the car Sheila thought about the little book with an 
> inserted
> paper delivered a few months earlier by a strange man.  He had said, "Mrs.
> Hamilton, I'm a lawyer representing a family that perished in the 
> holocaust.
> This little packet containing a small book and paper were given to me to
> deliver to you for Jennifer Rabinowitz.  They are left by her parents.  It
> should be presented to her on her seventeenth birthday.  Please don't tell
> Jennifer or your husband about this meeting.  A good day to you."  The man
> left the house and she ran to the front window to watch him drive away. 
> But
> no car appeared on the driveway or street.  There was no man walking away
> from the house.  Totally spooked, she ran to her bedroom without looking 
> at
> the little packet and placed it with other papers in her dresser.
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