[stylist] stylist Digest, Vol 81, Issue 17

[Kerry Thompson]

Jim,

lol. You and I both have difficulty with 500 words or less. In my own 
case I think of the problem, rather inelegantly, as diarrhea of the pen. 
I once tackled a writing exercise from a book. The instructions said to 
write one paragraph to one page. I wrote four pages before crashing. 
Mind you, I've never regretted it. Those four pages are the germ from 
which Marooner's Haven has grown. But, still, it illustrates the point. 
Brevity and I don't play well together. *grin*

BTW if you decide to expand the story, I'd love to see the result.

Though you directed your question to Bridgit, I'm going to stick my oar 
in too. If I were to revise this paragraph, I'd take out the phrase, 
"reprimanding Sean." Removing this phrase tightens and strengthens the 
paragraph IMO.

You wrote:

"yes, Dennis Day could play Sean I think."

And, who to play the great St Brendan? James Cagney, maybe?

Donna's got an idea, there. Another story about Sean, ormaybe another 
chapter in a novel? It can happen. My dragon Christmas stories started 
out as just stories, connected by being about the same characters. But, 
when I asked Robert to read the series, he said it looks suspiciously 
like a novel to him. So, if you accumulate enough stories about Sean...

Kerry