[stylist] comments on new submission untitled

[Barbara Hammel]

Vejas, she said this piece was not humorous.
Barbara




Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. -- Carl Sandburg
-----Original Message----- 
From: vejas
Sent: Wednesday, April 04, 2012 1:36 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] comments on new submission untitled

Bernadetta,
I really loved your story.
At first I thought the dad was the bad guy, since he was swearing
and all that, but then for the mom to just leave when her
daughter's head hurt made her a worse parent.
Still, I wondered what Erin's life was going to be like once she
got in the car.  Alan was really harsh with his wife, so he might
turn out being that way with his daughter.
It was a good story, but I don't see what makes it sattirical.  I
couldn't find any humor in it.
Vejas

_______________________________________________
Writers Division web site:
http://www.nfb-writers-division.net <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/>

stylist mailing list
stylist at nfbnet.org
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for 
stylist:
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/poetlori8%40msn.com