[stylist] Another story

[Jacqueline Williams]

Shawn,
What an imagination. I like the description of your characters: Alex and
Igor, but particularly, I love the "legs" supporting the house, their
angular bendings and rolling gait. 
I wish I had a house on legs that would take me out of this heat to the
coast of Oregon!
The house of Baba Yaga with its silo concept is original and intriguing. The
colors in her studio, the vistas from higher up.
I was not expecting an ending returning Alex to his home. 
I used to be intrigued by science fiction, Ray Bradbury's Fahrenheit 451
still to be read, but since trying to write a science fiction story for a
college class, I find it frustrating.
Also, I spend all of my spare time listening to the advances in science that
are giving our lives a science fiction quality now.
I do not like to think about leaving this world without knowing what will
happen in the next thirty years. It will be a different world for all of
you.
Keep writing. You make us think.
Jackie

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Jacobson, Shawn D
Sent: Friday, June 08, 2012 11:17 AM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
Subject: [stylist] Another story

I am attaching a story I submitted several years ago to the writer's
contest.

Recently, I used it in a writer's workshop at Balticon (a local science
fiction convention); we read the first few paragraphs of our work; then we
went out and savaged each others stuff in the spirit of constructive
criticism.  As a result, I decided to clean the story up and hope to send it
out to magazines in the near future.

Please let me know what you think.

Shawn Jacobson
Mathematical Statistician
Phone# (202)-475-8759
Fax# (202)-485-0275