[stylist] Another story

[Jacobson, Shawn D]

I would like to thank everyone for their comments.  I especially appreciate those who are not normally science fiction readers who read and enjoyed this story.

Barbara and Chris--thanks for catching my mistakes, in the next pass through, I will look at through VS thought and the commas.

Jackie--have you read anything by Zenna Henderson?  She was a science fiction writer who lived in Arizona and wrote in the 1950-s through 1980-s.  If you liked Bradbury, you might like her work as well.

Once again thanks for your comments, they inspire me and help me get stories finished.

Shawn

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of KajunCutie926 at aol.com
Sent: Monday, June 11, 2012 2:59 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: Re: [stylist] Another story

Shawn, I can't remember if I had commented but I can  nod and agree with 
Jackie here... you do make us think and your imagination is  superb.  The 
house on legs is actually I'm accustomed so that really did  make me smile..
Myrna
 
 
In a message dated 6/11/2012 1:28:16 P.M. Central Daylight Time,  
jackieleepoet at cox.net writes:

Shawn,
What an imagination. I like the description of your  characters: Alex and
Igor, but particularly, I love the "legs" supporting  the house, their
angular bendings and rolling gait. 
I wish I had a  house on legs that would take me out of this heat to the
coast of  Oregon!
The house of Baba Yaga with its silo concept is original and  intriguing. 
The
colors in her studio, the vistas from higher up.
I was  not expecting an ending returning Alex to his home. 
I used to be intrigued  by science fiction, Ray Bradbury's Fahrenheit 451
still to be read, but  since trying to write a science fiction story for a
college class, I find  it frustrating.
Also, I spend all of my spare time listening to the  advances in science 
that
are giving our lives a science fiction quality  now.
I do not like to think about leaving this world without knowing what  will
happen in the next thirty years. It will be a different world for all  of
you.
Keep writing. You make us think.
Jackie

-----Original  Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org  [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Jacobson, Shawn D
Sent:  Friday, June 08, 2012 11:17 AM
To: 'Writer's Division Mailing  List'
Subject: [stylist] Another story

I am attaching a story I  submitted several years ago to the writer's
contest.

Recently, I  used it in a writer's workshop at Balticon (a local science
fiction  convention); we read the first few paragraphs of our work; then we
went out  and savaged each others stuff in the spirit of  constructive
criticism.  As a result, I decided to clean the story up  and hope to send 
it
out to magazines in the near future.

Please let  me know what you think.

Shawn Jacobson
Mathematical  Statistician
Phone# (202)-475-8759
Fax#  (202)-485-0275



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