[stylist] Eve's Writing prompt

[Chris Kuell]

Hi Eve,

Your piece is filled with passion, which is always good. I actually agree 
with what Bridgit wrote, that I'd like to see some quotes to illustrate the 
claims you mentioned, but that somewhat depends on what your purpose in 
writing is. When I read a piece like this, the professional writer in me 
thinks -- this would make a good op-ed piece, and I want some quotes and 
references to back it up. But, for a blog post, what you wrote is fine.

One thing I think you could work on is semi-colons. You use a lot of them, 
too many in my opinion. For example, you wrote:
If we wish to be led by a Bishop; we need to go to church, not become one.
I'd suggest using a comma there instead of a semi-colon, or use a period and 
make it 2 sentences:
If we wish to be led by a Bishop, we need to go to church. Not become one.

I think this is a powerful sentence, and you may even want to end the piece 
with it. Nice job.

chris