[stylist] Song Writing prompt

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

Shawn,

I do use a lyrical, or poetic, voice in this essay, so perhaps that
didn't make it clear. I start with rocking and singing to my son, then I
move into his birth and illness, but I end back up where I start, which
is rocking him safe at home and he's no longer sick. I kept the tense
and POV when switching to the past. I had tried using past tense, but I
just didn't feel it flowed or kept you in the moment. I can try playing
with POV and tense more though and see what happens. Thanks.

Bridgit
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Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2013 10:49:53 -0500
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Bridgit

I think I got lost in the timing.  First you have the baby.  Then there
is an unresolved issue with the baby that goes on and on.  You're
holding the baby, your mourning the baby.  I think I got confused and it
is probably because I didn't pay enough attention to the piece.  There
was a lot of Email on the group this weekend and I may have gotten lost.

Sorry if I misunderstood the piece.

Shawn