[stylist] Barbara's prompt

[Barbara Hammel]

Thanks, all of you, for your comments.
I've already cried for almost eight years and shall cry many more for this 
poor child--and all others who walk in his shoes.
As a person who uses more than my fair share of words, I just can't imagine 
how it would be to be him.
Many's the time I wish I could see into both of their minds and know what 
they know and feel what they feel.
Barbara




Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. -- Carl Sandburg
-----Original Message----- 
From: Lynda Lambert
Sent: Thursday, February 14, 2013 8:59 AM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] Barbara's prompt

I agree with you both. Barbara, what you really brought out was the interior
life of a child who is unable to communicate effectively in order to get
help.  It was like the personna here is trapped inside of an uncooperative
body and completely recognizes that - there is such a strong awareness of
the challenge and there is that internal dialogue that we can see.  You
really reached inside yourself to bring this all out in the poem, I think.

Lynda


----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Jacobson, Shawn D" <Shawn.D.Jacobson at hud.gov>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Thursday, February 14, 2013 8:20 AM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Barbara's prompt


>I agree that this was a good poem.  I believe the line was from "The Sound 
>of Silence", but I may be wrong.
>
> I found a lot of natural tension in the poem; the protagonist is trying to 
> communicate, but can't.  It also works as a metaphor for how we can't 
> connect with our fellow man, so we through tantrums and get violent out of 
> frustration.
>
> Once again, good job.
>
> Shawn
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Chris Kuell
> Sent: Thursday, February 14, 2013 8:13 AM
> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Barbara's prompt
>
> Barbara,
>
> This was an interesting poem. It made me think--is the narrator you, or 
> one of your kids, or who? All my questions weren't answered, which I 
> actually like in a poem. Nice work.
>
> chris
>
>
>
> _______________________________________________
> Writers Division web site
> http://www.writers-division.net/
> stylist mailing list
> stylist at nfbnet.org
> http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for 
> stylist:
> http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/shawn.d.jacobson%40hud.gov
>
> _______________________________________________
> Writers Division web site
> http://www.writers-division.net/
> stylist mailing list
> stylist at nfbnet.org
> http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for 
> stylist:
> http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/llambert%40zoominternet.net
>



_______________________________________________
Writers Division web site
http://www.writers-division.net/
stylist mailing list
stylist at nfbnet.org
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for 
stylist:
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/poetlori8%40msn.com