[stylist] be warned kind of creepy

Fri Mar 29 21:38:22 UTC 2013

 I feel that the poem is well-written, and it actually reminds me 
a bit about the devil and his followers, that if you aren't a 
good person, they will be more than welcome to go with the devil.
Vejas

----- Original Message -----
From: Eve Sanchez <3rdeyeonly at gmail.com
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Date sent: Thu, 28 Mar 2013 21:01:48 -0700
Subject: Re: [stylist] be warned kind of creepy

It started out very beautifully, but I lost where it was going 
after a bit.
The "creepy crawly" words seemed to not fit to me and there were 
a few
places I would have reworded just to get the right syllable flow.  
But what
disturbed me was how it seemed the meaning changed.  It first 
sounded very
spiritual, and then ended as some bible/sunday school lesson.  
Was that your
intent all along? Not sure.  Eve

On Thu, Mar 28, 2013 at 12:29 PM, Kyle woodard 
<wallacewoodard at gmail.com>wrote:

 Ok it's not usually my habbit to write creepy, dark or morbit 
poetry.
 However this poem or song or whaterver it is speaks to me for 
some reason
 and it is almost as if it rights itself it is very long and I am 
not quite
 sure what to do with it but thought I would share to get some 
opinions.
 some potential tieles are ghost ship, ghost story, and Demon 
Dance  and it
 is comprised of mostly all quatrains with a couple of couplets

 AR 4.0

 Kindred spirits one and all
 here we are let us fall
 we have traveled far together
 now we shall die and live forever

 Seeking something out of sight
 giving up too tired to fight
 When the age has come and gone
 We shall still be singing our song

 For some things don’t end with death
 For some things aren’t finished with a breath
 Creepy crawly all around
 Listen to us now making our sound

 So what possessed us to be this way
 Haunting the world all night and day
 stories only tell one side of things
 leaving not q few loose strings

 All of the answers to soothe your dreams
 lie tied up amidst twisted schemes
 IF you take one lesson from our song
 be aware that some decisions are wrong

 We are past fixing our fate
 however there is still room on your plate
 So take heed and don’t follow us here
 some times it is good to have some fear

 Turn away now from our doom
 Walk away from this room
 For if you stay here any longer
 we shall win growing stronger

 Don’t follow us whatever you do
 and on the way out be sure to say Boo

 It wasn’t initially our goal
 to lose our body without a soul
 however after all of our skirmishes and fighting
 we were left squabbling and back biting

 Filled with hunger and greed
 trying to fill an empty need
 Once the darkness has a hold
 you grow bitter and your heart goes cold

 Then you know you’re in a bind
 when you’d walk all over your own kind
 just to hold on to a bit of treasure
 just for a wee moments pleasure

 But that’s the way we all went
 till we were all gone and downward sent
 now accursed to walk these shores
 coming a knocking on your doors

 Be aware children run away
 only come out at the noon of day
 for if you are caught outside
 we’ll take you on a wild ride

 one you won’t be forgeettign soon
 as we contemplate forthcoming doom
 run away and hide right quick
 watching out for us that slick

 Now be good little kiddies and mind your manners
 Making sure to flee our banners
 for only time will tell
 whether you go to heaven or hell

 So make up your mind and stick to it fast
 turn away from sin and make it your past
 or else we will come a calling
 we have no shame in helping you falling

 So flee flee right now
 just open your bible to find out how
 Now we have come to the end of our tale
 but if you care to stay we have a spot open in our jail

 --
 Wallace Kyle Woodard IV
 Independent Associate for Pre Paid Legal Services
 (512) 992-6346
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