[stylist] Poem - "Vixen"

[Chris Kuell]

Bill,

Sorry about your sister's cat. The imagery of your poem is good, although I 
personally don't see the connection of yellow to pain. The end is a bit of a 
shocker, the contrast between the wailing women and the cold, unfeeling 
poet. Two other edits:

 as cats ever get,, (you have two commas here)

as polished bone.Hourly laved, (you need a space after the period, and did 
you mean 'loved'?)

Thanks for sharing.

chris






----- Original Message ----- 
From: "William L Houts" <lukaeon at gmail.com>
To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Wednesday, April 09, 2014 4:08 PM
Subject: [stylist] Poem - "Vixen"


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> HI All,
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> My sister's cat died yesterday, and we've all been dealing with it. 
> Here's my poem on the subject:
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>  Vixen
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> She leads us through
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> her dying, a cat pioneer,
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> her breathing a clear slowing river.
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> Vixen is old
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> as cats ever get,,
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> an old lady white
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> as polished bone.Hourly laved,
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> her fur once shone
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> like mountain snow:
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> it's dingy now, pasty
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> as if yellow with pain.
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> Sometimes she purrs
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> while wheezing:a brave ragged gift,
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> Tender tormentors,we grasp
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> for more than she can spare.
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> The end comes After thrashing,
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> Vixen carried off on a raging sea.
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> Silent, I sit, strangely unmoved
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> while the women wail like Troy.
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> --WLH
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> -- 
> "Let's drink a toast now to who we really are."
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>           --Jane Siberry
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