[stylist] a different take on archaeology
Bridgit Pollpeter
bpollpeter at hotmail.com
Sat May 3 23:03:32 UTC 2014
Chris,
I like your use of diction; very descriptive, such as:
small pile of sun
dried boards in a thick bramble of grass.
Silent tears
glistened on Dean's face. His nostrils filled with a raw, earthy stench.
A
smooth, glassy coldness filled his mouth.
They shot out like bolts of
lightening now, crackling and hissing, completely covering that pristine
glass with a spider web of fine capillaries.
Sections like the following clue us into era without having to actually
tell us:
On the radio, Joe Nuxhall
announced the Big Red Machine's starting line up as they took the field
against the Mets on this sunny afternoon.
I don't think you need descriptions like the following because we
already see this personality in Dean through his actions. It can become
redundant to show us as well as tell us.
Dean was a good natured kid, and his anger dissipated with time.
Would Dean's parents really leave him with this man? Especially Len, who
obviously experienced the same treatment as a boy.
After Grandpa retrieves Dean from the well, we see a different side of
John, but I think there's more potential for this. And also, I don't
think we need authorial interjection stating how Dean notices the
difference because this is more for the benefit of the reader, and we
already see the change of character.
Can Grandpa have some more complexity? My paternal grandpa was similar
to this character. He didn't drink, but he was a real hard-ass who
thought he had the right to hit and knock me around if he deemed I was
misbehaving. Until a few years ago, I saw very little to like in my
grandpa. And yet, he displayed some complexity as most people do. After
the passing of my grandma, he kep many items of hers he had once mocked,
and he cared for his father-in-law until his death, visiting him, caring
for his house and well-being, even placing him in a home when the time
came, and continued to visit him. With my youngest cousin, born when I
was 17, my grandpa finally demonstrated some grand-fatherly affection
and love towards my cousin, never missing a game or school function with
him.
My point being, can you give us more complexity? The dinner scene has
potential for this. Or when he mentions the torture the Japanese
performed for POW's, implying John endured this. Something, even in his
gruff way, to display some complexity in this character. We don't have
to like him and can still be appalled with his behavior, but it would be
nice to have a more three-dimensional character in John.
When John offers an arrowhead to Dean, I see it as John's way of
apologizing. I'm in no way defending this character or condoning his
behavior, but we see more depth in John after retrieving Dean from the
well.
For me, this level of depth in such a despicable character is more
poignant and emotional than the scenes where John is abusing Dean. I
find more heart in this depth along with the older Deans character than
the flashback to John's abusive behavior.
The one little sentence about Dean's father having a look like before he
yells at Dean or Mommy gives us a clue that perhaps Dean's father can
perpetuate this abusive behavior even if not as bad as John.
I like how you frame the story with Dean and his son. I really like
framing devices, and it shows us how Dean has grown. Great ending
sentence too.
I was not as emotionally moved as some when reading about John's
behavior towards Dean or Dean's ordeal in the well, though it certainly
evoked something and is well-written. I'm more moved with Dean's
reaction towards his own son, and how Dean seems to have broken the
cycle of hard-assed, abusive fathers.
Over-all really good job, and I enjoyed reading this, as much as one can
enjoy reading about such aspects of human nature, smile.
Bridgit
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From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Chris
Kuell
Sent: Thursday, May 01, 2014 12:18 PM
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Subject: [stylist] a different take on archaeology
A couple days ago, Bill posted an interesting poem in which he used
archaeology to indicate the passage of time and the wearing down of
things.
It made me think of a story I wrote a while back, in which I used
archaeology both literally, and also to mean 'the preservation of'. It
was
originally published in the anthology "Mountain Voices: Illuminating the
Character of West Virginia" and I'll paste it below, for anyone who is
interested in reading. It's on the longish side, at 5600 words.
Down Home Archaeology
By Chris Kuell
"Daddy, Daddy!" called the little sandy haired boy in a Sponge Bob T
shirt.
The boy's parents stood chatting with the real estate agent. "C'mere,
Dad! C'mere!" The insistent boy grabbed his father's hand and
pulled.
"Excuse me for a second, I'll be right back." Turning to his son, Dean
Henderson said, "What is so important you have to interrupt me like
that?" "C'mere Daddy. You gotta see this. It's so cool." The boy pulled
Dean along. Frustrated by the slow progress, Tyler let go and
sprinted to a corner of the backyard. He squatted near a small pile of
sun
dried boards in a thick bramble of grass. Dean approached, expecting to
be
shown a snakeskin or maybe a bird's nest. As he got closer, Dean saw his
son
peering over the rim of an abandoned well. Panic catapulted him into
action. "Tyler!" he yelled, racing towards the boy with a speed and
purpose he hadn't
mustered since high school. Tyler's eyes opened wide as his father
scooped
him up and clutched the small body tightly to his chest. Silent tears
glistened on Dean's face. His nostrils filled with a raw, earthy stench.
A
smooth, glassy coldness filled his mouth. He shut his eyes and dropped
to
his knees, holding the boy close.
* * * * *
It was early summer, 1972, and six year old Dean Henderson sat unbuckled
next to his father, Len, in the family station wagon. The father son
team
was headed to Grandpa's house in Fairmont. On the radio, Joe Nuxhall
announced the Big Red Machine's starting line up as they took the field
against the Mets on this sunny afternoon. Dean was excited, and a little
nervous. His Mom had gone to her ten year high school reunion, which his
Dad
had no interest in attending. Instead, the boys of the family were going
to
Grandpa's for the first time in almost four years. Dad was going to
leave
Dean at Grandpa's while he visited some of his old friends. Len
Henderson
told his wife that they were going fishing, but Dean noticed Daddy had
brought a lot more beer and Fritos than fishing gear.
The ride was long and boring. His Dad didn't talk much; he was too
focused
on the ballgame and driving to pay Dean any mind. Tom Seaver had pitched
a
no hitter through six innings for the Mets, and Len was disgusted. Dean
occupied his time counting cars, looking through his collection of rocks
and
imagining the fun he would have at Grandpa's farm. Daddy had told him
that
arrowheads galore could be found at the farm, and Dean was anxious to
start
looking.
They arrived at Grandpa's late in the afternoon. The Henderson place was
a
typical farmhouse built in the early twentieth century. A basic cube
shape
of white-washed clapboards covered by a simple, low-pitched roof, and a
chimney perpetually leaning at a precarious angle. Dean's
grandfather
had added plumbing in the forties, but, other than that, only
superficial
modifications had been made. Dean's Grandpa, John Henderson, met them at
the
door of the old place. He wore thinning, sky-blue overalls with a dark
rectangle in the chest where a label used to be.
Len and John Henderson shook hands, then Dean went to hug his Grandpa
but
the old man didn't even bend over. He just stared at Dean in a cool way,
as
if he was a stray dog that might crap on his lawn. Uncertain how to
proceed,
Dean just hugged the old man's thighs and said a friendly hello. They
sat in the front room, the television off, strained chitchat
intermittently flowing between the two adults. Dean kicked his sneakered
feet up and down, as if he were on his backyard swing. He tossed an
embroidered pillow up into the air and practiced catching. Grandpa
scowled
at the child.
Dean looked over to his Dad during one pause and asked, "Daddy, can I go
look around?"
Grandpa said, "Don't you go gettin' into trouble. You hear me boy?"
Dean's father put a comforting hand on his shoulder. "Why don't you just
hunt around out back, see what you can find. Don't get into any of
Grandpa's
equipment, though, you hear?"
"Yes sir," Dean answered, already making his way to the door. Dean was
busy digging at the edge of a cornfield with a favorite rock he
called Digger when his father came to say goodbye.
"What you doing, Deano?"
Dean smiled up at his idol. "I'm finding you some worms for fishing."
The
boy put a hand in one pocket and pulled out a fist full of dirt and
wriggling earthworms. Dean's father looked surprised then chuckled and
accepted the gift.
"Now listen, kid. I'm going to meet up with Mr. Wills and some of the
other
guys. You're going to stay here with Grandpa, and I'll be back late
tonight." Dean stared intently at his Dad. This was it, he knew. He had
to
be brave for his Daddy.
"Now, you mind your Grandpa. He can be a crotchety old man, but if you
just
do as you're told and stay outta trouble, everything will be fine." They
hugged, and Dean watched as his father returned to the station wagon and
drove away down the dirt road.
A few minutes later, he heard the shuffle of his grandfather's boots
approaching.
"Hey Grandpa," he said, "Wanna help me dig for arrowheads?"
"We ain't got time for such foolishness, boy. Come with me over to the
side
of the house. There's a pile of wood needs stacking."
Eager to help and hopefully get on the old man's good side, Dean ran
ahead
to size up the job. When he rounded the corner of the farmhouse, Dean
saw
what appeared to be a mountain of logs. There were four cords of roughly
cut
wood, dumped by a truck in a mound three times his height. Behind him,
his Grandpa ordered, "G'won, boy. Grab a handful. See them two
trees over yonder? Make a line of wood from one to the other." Dean
struggled to wrestle a log out of the pile, grunting as he carried it
over to the trees. His grandfather watched him, taking five or six
pieces
himself each trip.
"Boy, is you only going to take one piece at a time? You're going to be
out
here all night at that rate."
"Grandpa," Dean said, "I'm just a kid."
"What are you, a little Momma's boy?" the old man snorted. "Come here
and
let me pile you up."
He had the boy stick out his arms, and then put three pieces in them.
The
edge of the top piece dug into Dean's chest and he let out an, "Owwww!"
His Grandpa ridiculed him as they stacked more wood. "You better toughen
up,
little boy. I can tell your Daddy's been too easy on you. You're soft,
just
like him. You want your Momma wiping your ass the rest of your life?
Cripe's
sake."
Dean's face reddened. He wished his Mom and Dad were here to tell
Grandpa to
shut up. Clenching his teeth tightly, he continued with the mundane
chore of
getting wood piled into his arms, walking it over to the growing stack,
dropping it on the ground and placing it in the right direction. After a
half hour or so, Dean worked up the courage to ask, "Hey Grandpa, I'm
hungry. Can we have a snack?"
The old man glared at him with disgust, dropping a sharp piece of wood
onto
the reddening flesh of the child's arms. "Dinner's at five o'clock.
You'll
work 'till then."
Dean was smart enough not to push it. He pouted and continued stacking
the
endless pile of wood until his Grandpa glanced at the sun and said, "I'm
gunna go fix supper. You keep stacking until I call you in. Hear me?"
Dean was mad, so he didn't answer the old man, just dropped his pile and
placed a knotty piece in its spot. A flash of pain shot through his head
as
a calloused hand twisted his ear.
"Answer me when I'm talking to you, boy" the old man said.
Dean dropped the log, crying out in surprise and pain. "Momma's boy,"
the
old man spat as he went around to the front of the house.
Dean rubbed his sore ear and cried quietly. Why was Grandpa being so
mean?
What kind of vacation was this? He sat, refusing to pick up another
stick of
wood until Grandpa called him in for dinner.
Dean was a good natured kid, and his anger dissipated with time. He was
looking forward to supper as he entered the house, letting the screen
door
slam behind him.
"Easy on the door boy," his grandpa hollered from the kitchen. Dean
ignored the grumpy old man and made his way to the bathroom to wash up.
When he came out into the kitchen, his Grandpa still looked crabby. In
fact,
the old man's eyes were reddened slits of irritation. He held a spatula
in
one hand, a tumbler of whiskey in the other. Pointing the spatula at
Dean,
he said, "Boy, what the hell is wrong with you? You better git them
shoes
off and leave 'em by the front door. Jesus, look at the dirt your
highness
has drug in the house."
Dean glanced around, but didn't notice any more dirt on the floor than
when
he came in. Remembering his father's words, he slipped off his Keds and
carried them to the mat at the door. Upon returning, Dean took one of
the
chairs at the small kitchen table. His Grandfather carried over two
plates
and put one in front of him. On one part of the plate was a disgusting
pile
of fried liver and onions. Next to that was a spoonful of slimy lima
beans.
Then there was a wrinkly brown thing that Dean mistakenly thought was a
mud
ball. It was actually a shriveled baked potato that John Henderson had
cooked for himself but not eaten several days ago. In painful silence,
the
old man started eating his dinner. Dean sat quietly, head bowed, a dour
sadness across his face.
"What's a matter boy? Thought you was hungry." The old man said between
bites.
Eyes still down, Dean said, I don't like this."
"You ain't even tried it."
Dean glanced at his plate. The lima beans looked like they were
somebody's
guts, and the liver was somebody's guts. He wasn't going to eat any mud
ball
either. He bit his lower lip and sat pouting.
"Suit yourself boy. That's all you're getting. You can eat it now, or
eat it
for breakfast, don't matter to me none."
Grandpa drained his whiskey and poured himself another. The two sat in
silence except for the sounds of the old man's chewing. Dean thought
about
his parents and how they usually let him eat a peanut butter sandwich if
he
didn't like what they had.
"Do you know when my Daddy's coming back?"
"I don't reckon for a while. He's off getting drunk with Bobby Wills and
that car stealing Caudell boy."
Grandpa took another bite of supper and said," C'mon and eat some of
that
liver. It ain't gunna kill ya."
Dean sat sulking. He wished his Dad would come back and fix him some
real
food. Was he really getting drunk with a car stealer?
Grandpa spoke again through a mouth half full of food. "If you ain't
going
to eat, git the broom and sweep up the dirt you tracked in here." Dean
got up and found the broom and dustpan in a closet and tried his best
to sweep up around the door in the front room. His Mom and Dad had never
made him sweep before, so he did his best to mimic what he thought they
did.
After picking up a small pile of dust, he chucked it out the screen
door. He
glanced around the room and saw the pillow he had been tossing earlier
on
the floor instead of on the couch where it belonged. He kicked the
pillow up
onto the couch. It plopped hard into the fat middle of the center
cushion.
It felt good to kick the old man's pillow, so Dean fetched it and
replaced
it on the floor. Dean imagined he was a football kicker, trying for a
long
field goal. He ran up to the pillow, kicked low and hard, the shouting
crowd
behind, cheering him on. The pillow soared straight and true, smacking
hard
into the top part of the couch.
The next kick was from even further back. This time, the pillow cleared
the
back of the couch, hitting the big picture window with a soft thud. A
second
of panic shot through the boy, but then he realized the pillow was soft
and
wouldn't break anything. He repeated his kicks a few more times, honing
his
technique. Joe Nuxhall's voice played in his brain, as announcer for the
amazing boy kicker.
"It's incredible, folks," Joe announced to the crowd. "The youngest
professional kicker in football history!"
Preparing for his next attempt, Dean had a great idea. To one side of
the
couch was a tall brass floor lamp. Dean relocated it behind the couch, a
little left of center. Then he balanced the broom to the right behind
the
couch, effectively making goal posts. Now it was getting challenging.
Like a
real pro football kicker, Young Dean Henderson would attempt to kick the
pillow all the way across the room between the goal posts. The fans in
his
mind were going nuts. "Deano! Deano!" they chanted, using his Daddy's
pet
nickname for him.
Dean was ready. He called out the signals in his mind, there's the snap,
and
the ball is down, three steps and kick. . . . The pillow caught the left
instep of Dean's socked foot. Instead of flying straight and splitting
the
goal posts, it hooked left. Dean watched as the pillow drifted towards
the
brass lamp, then smacked it head on. The lamp toppled backwards, a fist
sized knob on the top hitting into the window before spinning and
falling
with a crash to the floor.
For just a second, but plenty of time for his young brain to compute,
Dean
thought it was going to be okay. The lamp had fallen, but the window
hadn't
broken. It was going to be okay; he wouldn't get into trouble. Then, he
heard a tiny, cracking sound, like someone breaking a pencil. Before
him,
through that magnificent piece of glass which offered a view of the
front
yard, Grandma's old flower beds, and the plush hill farms beyond, came a
fine line. Then, a snapping sound, and another line magically appeared
before his eyes. More crackling, more lines. They shot out like bolts of
lightening now, crackling and hissing, completely covering that pristine
glass with a spider web of fine capillaries. Then, in a final blow to
the
fragment of hope the small boy still held in his heart, the glass obeyed
the
pull of gravity. Thousands of diamond like shards fell to the floor.
Dean barely heard, and certainly didn't comprehend, the three or four
heavy
footsteps before something solid and angry walloped him in the back of
the
head. The forty eight pound youngster toppled forward, smashing his
shoulder
into the couch and crumpling to the floor.
"God dammit, boy!" growled the voice.
Stars spun in Dean's head. Tears streamed and he found his voice for
crying.
A strong farmer's hand clamped down on him and hoisted him into the air.
Whack! Whack! Whack! The old man spanked him fiercely with his open
hand.
The wails of the child hit a frenzied pitch.
"I knew you was gunna be nothing but trouble. Well, I'll sure learn ya
how
to behave."
Dean bawled with the pain, sadness and humiliation. Grandpa dropped him
to
the floor, where upon impact, he bit clean through his bottom lip. The
old
man laced up his boots, teeth clenched, face crimson with fury. John
Henderson stood, looked out his broken picture window, then hoisted the
limp, cowering body over his shoulder like a sack of seeds. He banged
the
screen door open and stormed out back to his tractor. The jouncing dug a
bony shoulder into Dean's belly, adding to his overall suffering. The
old
man dropped Dean with a thud into a wood trailer, then jumped into the
seat
of his John Deere. Firing up the tractor, he drove off into the fields.
Dean continued sobbing, balled up in a protective fetal position. He
sucked
on the blood from his ripped lower lip and drank in the coppery sorrow.
His
Mom and Dad swatted his bottom now and then when he was fresh, or did
something dangerous, but they had never come close to the fury John
Henderson had just unleashed.
Five minutes later, the old man whipped the tractor sharply to the right
and
shut off the engine. Dean's crying had subsided to a rhythmic
whimpering, so
he heard Grandpa jump down off the tractor and grunt as he moved
something. "Boy," he growled, "Git over here." Reluctantly, Dean hoisted
himself to a sitting position to see what Grandpa
wanted. The old man stood next to a big rectangular hole in the ground.
All
the grass at the edges of the hole was dead, brown and flattened. Next
to
the hole on the ground was an old barn door. A spongy fungus grew on one
edge of the door, as if it had been there a long time.
"I'm gunna count to three and you better have your ass over here." Dean
tried to stifle his crying and get up out of the trailer. A dull ache
hammered throughout his head; his lip throbbed with every heartbeat.
Needles
of hurt shot through his thighs as he climbed over the railing of the
trailer.
Refusing to look at his grandfather, Dean approached, head down and
sullen.
His eyes were puffy and wet, but he didn't allow new tears to flow. "You
see this?" Grandpa asked him, finger pointing into the abyss.
Remembering the painful ear twist, a miniscule "yes" escaped the boy. He
stepped towards the edge of the hole. It was quite big, maybe twice as
large
as a refrigerator. Layers of dark, rich dirt cascaded downwards towards
the
bottom.
"Git in, boy," the old man barked.
Dean glanced up at him. Was he serious? Why did he want him to go down
there? If he thought of inquiring, he didn't have a chance. The old
man's
leather boot kicked, propelling him forward. He pitched head first into
the
pit, flipping over and landing on his back some eight feet below.
Although
the ground was moist, the impact still knocked the breath out of him.
Panic
seized Dean as he gasped for air. The old man stuck his face over the
edge.
The eyes that stared down were perfectly calm.
"The Japs had ways of making prisoners behave. This one's easy, be
grateful." The old man dragged the large barn door over the top of the
hole, closing it off from the outside world. With that, darkness grew
over
the top of the hole like the moon eclipsing the sun.
At the bottom of the vault, Dean urgently sucked in the damp, musty air,
but
there just wasn't enough. His heart raced while the darkness weighed
down
upon him. In this tomb, terror gripped like the talons of a large bird.
Animal sounds gurgled from deep inside him, sounds which served to
frighten
him more. A clammy sweat sheathed his small body as images of killer
spiders, poisonous snakes and boy eating trilobites tormented him. It
took a few minutes to quiet his fears to a reasonable whimpering. The
cool dampness of the dirt penetrated his thoughts and helped to break
the
grip of the talons.
He took a few deep breaths, and between sobs he tried to yell. "Grandpa,
let
me out."
He listened, but heard only his pulse beating in his neck and the sounds
of
sorrow coming from inside his chest.
"Grandpa!" he said, louder this time. "I'm scared. Please let me out!"
There
was no response.
"I'm sorry I broke your window. I'm really sorry. Please open up." A
cloak of panic overtook Dean and he started crying again. Hard, racking
sobs convulsed through his small body. Sitting on the damp dirt, he
pulled
his knees to his chest and put his head down on his arms. Blubbery snot
dripped down his legs, but he didn't care. His six year old body
trembled
like that of a palsied old man.
"Please," he pleaded to the darkness.
Time passed, as did the outburst. When Dean had collected himself, he
tried
to contact the outside world again.
"Grandpa, are you out there?"
He heard nothing. Had Grandpa left? Dean thought he would have heard the
tractor. Was he all alone? Out here in the field? An icy shudder
trickled
down his spine.
"Help!" he screamed. "Help! Help!" He shouted until his throat felt like
it
had been scoured with steel wool, then he collapsed to the ground for
another sobbing binge. It was hopeless. John Henderson owned nearly
fifty
acres of land. The closest neighbor was almost a mile away. Sorrow kept
bleeding out of the boy; he bit his lower lip and reopened the wound.
The
blood trickled down his chin like wax down a candle.
At that moment, Dean Henderson was fairly certain he would never get
out. After the next bawling wave passed, Dean was able to clear some of
the self
pity out of his head and consider possible modes of escape. He stood,
rubbed
some of the soreness out of his legs and jumped towards the top of the
hole,
but it was far out of reach. He tried to climb, but the hard packed mud
gave
no holds. Each attempt only ended in his sliding a few inches back down
to
the bottom. In the darkness, Dean felt his way around searching for
something, anything to grab and pull himself upwards. Trembling fingers
found nothing but dirt and clay. One end of the prison was lower than
the
other, and about a half inch of muddy water soaked his socked feet.
Further
depressed, he moved back to the dry section and sat, silent tears
rolling
one by one down his cheeks. There was no way a little kid could get out
of
here. In his child's mind, Dean wished he had a rope or something to
help
him escape, but he had nothing except Digger and a few other rocks.
He stood, took the rocks out of his pocket and threw them at the old
door
with a scream, "Let me out!"
The rocks plinked into the door uselessly and fell back to the ground.
One
hit Dean on the head, further infuriating him and bringing on another
deluge
of sadness. Dean sat, curled into a ball, feeling as though he must be
the
sorriest kid in the world. Silent lips worded the name, Momma, over and
over.
At some point later in the night, Dean felt around on the ground until
he
located the familiar curve of Digger. Dean clutched the rock tightly,
rubbing one side with a dirty thumb. He needed to hold something of
comfort
in this murky cell. Mindlessly, he used the rock to churn up the dirt
near
where he was sitting. The task occupied his otherwise miserable mind, so
he
began to carve linear trenches in the bottom of the pit. About four rows
in,
he hit something solid, and he dug around it. Expecting a rock, Dean
felt
the object with interest. His fingertips encountered something smooth
and
possibly metallic. Whatever it was, he now had a purpose, and the
excavation
continued. The mystery item was deeper than he expected, so he had to
use
his fingers as well as his rock tool to extricate the find. After about
ten
minutes, he pulled out an object a little smaller than his hand. Dirt
chunks fell away from various surfaces and he ran his fingers over the
treasure. He felt the head, gun and legs of a miniature soldier. It was
metal and the limbs wouldn't move, unlike those of the plastic GI Joe he
had
back home. Dean took the soldier, which he named Joe, over to the small
pool
of water and washed him off. He dried and polished him with his shirt,
proud
of his fine work.
He returned to his spot and resumed digging, Joe acting as job
supervisor.
In the next hour the team unearthed three rocks, a marble and a skeleton
key. Each item was washed and cleaned with care. Dean convinced himself
that
the key would open up that door, if he could only get to it.
He took comfort in his treasures, but the hour was late and he grew
tired of
digging. Hunger cramped his empty belly, and on an impulse he popped the
glass marble into his mouth, rolling it around on his tongue and sucking
it
to placate the pangs. Momma would kill him for putting a marble in his
mouth, but he didn't care. He hadn't eaten anything since lunch, and
Momma
was far away. It reminded him of a gumball, or a big jawbreaker, and
that
seemed to ease the discomfort a bit. As the time passed, his sore body
grew
too heavy to hold up and he slumped over onto the dirt. The spit covered
marble slid harmlessly out of his mouth, and he was swept away into a
thick,
dreamless sleep.
Dean awoke a few hours later as the first rays of morning beamed into
the
top of his prison. Mercifully, his sleep had been solid, and he hadn't
noticed Grandpa removing the heavy door.
"C'mon, boy. Let's go."
The old man stooped and reached low into the pit. Dean stood up slowly,
like
a drunk after a night in the tank sleeping it off. He stared up at his
grandfather, reluctant to touch that hand. Would he pick him up, just to
drop him down into the hole again? He decided it was worth the risk. The
old
man hoisted him out of the hole with ease, carried him over and sat him
on
the tractor. He then took a minute and replaced the barn door. He picked
Dean up and put him down on his lap as he started the tractor. Pulling
it
around, heading for home, he said, "I hope you learned your lesson." A
second later, he asked, "Wanna steer the tractor?"
At any other time, Dean would have wet his pants at the possibility of
driving Grandpa's big green tractor. Dean loved cars, trucks and
machinery.
Instead of taking the wheel, though, he just shook his head and
scratched
with dirty fingers at the dried blood on his chin.
The two traveled wordlessly back to the farmhouse, where Dean noticed
Grandpa had covered the broken window with a thick, blue piece of
tarpaulin.
There was no sign of Daddy's car.
Inside, Grandpa gave him a large glass of orange juice. "Where's my
Daddy?" he asked the old man. "Ain't back yet. He'll be home shortly."
Grandpa drew a hot bath and laid out some clean clothes. Dean's Mom or
Dad
usually stayed with him while he was in the tub, talking or singing
songs to
make bath time fun. Grandpa left him alone, saying only that he should
be
sure to scrub his face good, that right now he looked like a has been
prizefighter.
Making his way back towards the front room, Dean was overpowered by the
smell of bacon and hot biscuits.
"I'm making us a nice down home West Virginia breakfast. Is that okay
with
you?" Grandpa looked inquisitively at the boy.
Dean was starving, so he nodded in assent.
"Won't be done for a few minutes. Why don't you go watch a little TV
until I
call you."
Grandpa was noticeably different. He hadn't yelled, pinched his ear, or
done
anything mean this morning. The boy was puzzled, but pleased, so he did
as
he was told.
A short while later he was stuffing his face with vigor. The salt on
his
eggs stung his lip, but it barely slowed him down. Food never tasted so
good.
After breakfast, Grandpa asked Dean to follow him into his bedroom. Dean
stood there while Grandpa poked around in a closet. He came back and set
a
toaster sized wooden box in front of the boy. He bent down and opened
it. "Take a look at this," he said, all smiles and tenderness. Inside
the box
were perhaps fifty arrowheads. "These are ones I've found over the years
during spring plowing. Winter always brings 'em up."
Dean was awestruck. He looked at the old man, who told him, "Go ahead,
you
can have one."
Dean rifled through the collection. Some of the arrowheads were chipped
or
broken, but most were intact. He found a large one, a blueish brown
color,
still sharp and pointy.
"Can I have this one, Grandpa?"
"Sure, it's yours," Grandpa said. "Now, are we friends?" The old man
stuck
out a leathery hand. Dean hesitated, then shook it. Grandpa put his box
of
treasures back and told him to go play outside until his Daddy arrived.
Dean and his tin soldier Joe were scouting for Indians when the Country
Squire came rolling up the driveway. He ran over and jumped into the
arms of
his Dad.
"Daddy, where were you?"
Len Henderson groaned and hugged him tightly. "I'm sorry, Deano. We
played
cards late and I was really tired, so I just slept at Mr. Will's place."
Len held him out and looked him over. "Hey Champ, what happened to your
lip?" Dean's face took on a somber
expression, shame and anger not deeply buried.
"Grandpa knocked me on the floor, and I bit my lip. He was mean Daddy, I
don't
like it here."
Len Henderson stared mutely at the boy for a minute, noticing for the
first
time the tin soldier in his hand. His eyes didn't move from the soldier
as
he lowered his son to the ground.
"I'm going inside to talk to Grandpa and fetch your stuff. You stay out
here
in the car and find us a good station on the radio. OK?" Dean got into
the
driver seat and his father closed the car door.
"I'll be back shortly, you stay here."
Dean put Joe away in his pocket, then turned the radio on and fiddled
with
the dial. Mostly all he could find was static. He was beginning to catch
a
Gospel station when he heard shouting coming from the house. He turned
the
volume down, but the sounds were muffled and difficult to make out. A
large
crashing sound made Dean jump. It was followed by the sound of metal
falling, like someone had dropped a tray full of silverware. Dean
quickly
turned the volume back up and resumed tuning the radio when he saw his
father coming to the car, Dean's small suitcase in hand. He moved over
to
his side as his Dad slid in behind the wheel.
Len Henderson's complexion was a mottled red, and he was breathing
harder
than normal. His hair was mussed, and a trickle of blood spilled out of
his
lower lip. Dean felt concerned, but something told him it wasn't the
time to
talk. His father had that look that he sometimes did right before he
yelled
at Dean or Mommy, so he pulled out Joe and his new arrowhead and played
for
a while.
An awkward silence loomed in the car as they weaved their way to the
highway. Once traveling at seventy up the Interstate, Dean put down his
things to look at his Dad. His skin was its normal color now, and his
Dad
looked like himself, except for the stubble and the split lip. "Daddy,
are you all right?" Len turned and smiled at his son. "I'm fine, Champ.
Don't you worry. I'm
sorry things didn't go well at Grandpa's. You okay?"
Dean watched his father for a second, wondering what answer his Dad was
looking to hear.
"I'm okay, Daddy, glad we're going home. And now we got matching lips!"
They
laughed, and Dean's father ruffled his fingers through the boy's crew
cut. A few miles further down the road, Dean was fingering the tip of
the large
arrowhead as he thought about his night in the hole. He never wanted to
visit Grandpa ever again. He rolled his window down and tossed the
arrowhead
out onto the highway, glad to be rid of it. Let it be run over and
crushed,
along with the memories of that mean old man.
* * * * *
"Daddy, you're hurting me," Little Tyler Henderson croaked, his father's
arms like a boa constrictor around his small chest.
Unconscious of his grip, Dean careened back to the moment and loosened
his
clutch on Tyler. The drumbeat of his pulse still throbbed in his temple
as
he tried to shake the fright of the exhumed memory. So fresh in his mind
right now, it could have happened this very morning. Yet, Dean couldn't
recall ever thinking of that horrible trip since it happened. Like the
tin
soldier and the marble, the memory had been buried a long time ago.
"Dean, are you all right?" Tasha Henderson put a hand on her husband's
shoulder. Dean looked pale, his eyes bloodshot and wet.
"Dean?" she repeated.
He stood, with Tyler still held snugly in his arms. He snuffled, and
wiped
his eyes with a shirt sleeve.
"Yeah, I'm OK. I just had this horrible image . . . scared the hell out
of
me I guess."
"We can make sure the owners do something to protect that well," the
real
estate agent said.
"Be sure to do that," Dean told her. Then he grabbed his wife's hand and
said, "C'mon honey. I don't think this place is for us."
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