[stylist] Fw: Poem - "Arrival" - First Draft
Chris Kuell
ckuell at comcast.net
Wed May 7 17:03:37 UTC 2014
Second try...
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From: "Chris Kuell" <ckuell at comcast.net>
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Sent: Wednesday, May 07, 2014 9:38 AM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Poem - "Arrival" - First Draft
> Hi Bill,
>
> Another interesting poem, this one certainly more accessible to the common
> folk. I don't know if there were formatting issues resulting from cutting
> and pasting, but in my version, you need a space between 'enough' and 'to'
> in the drink line. There are also a couple of spots where you need a space
> after a period. One question I had was about your choice of 'milk'. Of
> course, we humans associate water with life, s the two are inseperable.
> But milk? Sure, it's the initial sustinance of many of our world's babies.
> But if your aliens want to experience what it is to be human--give them a
> beer! A bottle of California red--even a Coke and a smile.
>
> chris
>
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