[stylist] The Golgotha Tarot

[William L Houts]

Thanks, Chris, for giving "Golgotha" a read, and for your encouraging 
remarks.



--Bill


On 7/29/2015 1:12 PM, Chris Kuell via stylist wrote:
> Hey Bill,
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> This was actually a fairly longish short story, in my opinion. For future
> reference, you might want to mention that.
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>          I.            Having said that, I think you have a very entertaining
> story here. Sure, it needs a lot of editing, but I think it's worth the
> trouble. Plus, you learn a lot by doing many edits (less likely to make
> those same mistakes again).
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> I didn't mind the POV shift, as I understood when the protagonist was
> speaking/thinking, and when Klinghoffer was. But, Bridgit was right in
> saying you could make that clearer and smoother. I love the sense of humor,
> the irony, the cockiness of the piece. And I actually found the ending
> satisfying. Without looking, the student saw the teacher as someone he
> didn't want to be, and left. There's your change.
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> Take some time to rework this, and I think you could find someone to publish
> it. Bewildering Stories, perhaps.
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> Chris
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> Bridgit already gave you an excellent critique, so I won't take the time to
> do the same. However, you should definitely appreciate the time she put in
> to it, and realize that writing quality fiction is an art, and takes a lot
> of work.
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