[stylist] Workshopping: Lucy and Lithe Chapters 1, 2 and a bit of 3

[Shelley Alongi]

I thought your story was interesting. Engine seem like the father was paying too much attention to the daughter sometimes especially after he tried to give her hot chocolate when she just been sick. But I was wondering if they were going to the same planet that the teacher was going to because it seems like a planet that was at a constant temperature of 40 below zero would have no light. I read the entire story. I hope you plan to publish this. It always Bears another at it but that's pretty much with anything. Nice story and I start to it :-) Y

shelley Queen of Bells out Sent from my iPhone

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 6:27 PM, Debby Phillips via stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
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> Theea, I loved your story.  It held my interest, first of all.  I also found your characters very believable.  And I absolutely loved how you brought your Christian beliefs into this story of the future.  I could feel the despair of the parents, and understood Lucy's terror.  I hope that you send this somewhere to be published.  The one thing I was wondering about though: how would they live in forty below temperatures? And how were they going to get there? Maybe you'll write a sequel?    Blessings,    Debby
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