[stylist] Workshopping: Lucy and Lithe Chapters 1, 2 and a bit of 3

[Miss Thea]

Hi, Shelley.
Thanks so much for reading my story. Your comments are welcome, as always.
As the story states, the world is in a constant state of war. Jim pays a lot 
of attention to his daughter because he loves her, she is his only child, 
and he has in the back of his mind the awful choice he and his wife agreed 
to make if they didn't find a place offworld.
They've come to an impasse. I don't want to give too much away.
Just to say that the story starts out with the parents having agreed to make 
a horrible choice, which they were saved from doing at the last minute.

I would love to see this published, so I guess I better get back at it. LOL
PS: As I have several pain conditions affecting my hands, I beg all your 
indulgence. I'd like to finish at least this story before looking at and 
commenting on all your work, just because the pain in my hands allows me 
only so much time for writing.
Thea





Thea Ramsay
Wellness Coach
Herbalife Distributor
www.GoHerbalife.com/thea-ramsay/en-CA
-----Original Message----- 
From: Shelley Alongi via stylist
Sent: Monday, September 21, 2015 4:42 AM
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Cc: Shelley Alongi ; writingblind at yahoogroups.com
Subject: Re: [stylist] Workshopping: Lucy and Lithe Chapters 1,2 and a bit 
of 3

I thought your story was interesting. Engine seem like the father was paying 
too much attention to the daughter sometimes especially after he tried to 
give her hot chocolate when she just been sick. But I was wondering if they 
were going to the same planet that the teacher was going to because it seems 
like a planet that was at a constant temperature of 40 below zero would have 
no light. I read the entire story. I hope you plan to publish this. It 
always Bears another at it but that's pretty much with anything. Nice story 
and I start to it :-) Y

shelley Queen of Bells out Sent from my iPhone

> On Sep 20, 2015, at 6:27 PM, Debby Phillips via stylist 
> <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
>
> Theea, I loved your story.  It held my interest, first of all.  I also 
> found your characters very believable.  And I absolutely loved how you 
> brought your Christian beliefs into this story of the future.  I could 
> feel the despair of the parents, and understood Lucy's terror.  I hope 
> that you send this somewhere to be published.  The one thing I was 
> wondering about though: how would they live in forty below temperatures? 
> And how were they going to get there? Maybe you'll write a sequel? 
> Blessings,    Debby
>
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