[Stylist] New story

[Jacobson, Shawn D]

Thanks.

Shawn

From: Stylist <stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org> On Behalf Of Chris Kuell via Stylist
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Subject: Re: [Stylist] New story

Hey Shawn,

Your story is a bit long, and there are probably more than a dozen typos that I won't point out here. I enjoyed the conclusion about the Kree 'domesticating' other beings like we did to the dog, but for me, I'm not sure the starting Bible verse works since the protagonist isn't religious at all, and that's a pretty obscure quote.

Good luck finding a home for it.

Chris

PS: I like 'Final Analysis' as a nerd bar name.


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