[Stylist] poem feedback welcome
Shawn Jacobson
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Wed Feb 28 02:21:22 UTC 2024
Ann
Interesting poem, I'll have to think about that one.
Shawn Jacobson
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On Tuesday, February 27, 2024 at 12:52:40 PM EST, Ann Chiappetta via Stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
Hi all-
My email for Feedback is anniecms64 at gmail.com
This is a modified ghazal poem. It uses couplets independent from one another and a strong repetitive word. Originally I read it was also rigid regarding the meter and syllabic style but those written in English aren’t adhered to as strictly.
Read more here:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ghazal#:~:text=A%20ghazal%20commonly%20consists%20of,those%20of%20the%20Petrarchan%20sonnet.
I played with it a bit and this is the result.
Mileage
Ann Chiappetta
rain blows east
wind pushes east
chalet slopes west
high rise faces east
90° of north
Going home is east
The dog star howls
summer bright in the east
distance dilutes Love
>From west to east
Ann, said the loved boy
Return to me
I wept in the west
and faced east
2023
Ann Chiappetta, MS
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