[Stylist] poem feedback welcome

[Shawn Jacobson]

Ann
Interesting poem, I'll have to think about that one.
Shawn Jacobson
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    On Tuesday, February 27, 2024 at 12:52:40 PM EST, Ann Chiappetta via Stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:  
 
 
Hi all-

My email for Feedback  is anniecms64 at gmail.com

  

This is a modified ghazal poem. It uses couplets  independent from one another and a strong repetitive word. Originally I read it was also rigid regarding the meter and syllabic style but those written in English  aren’t adhered to as strictly.

Read more here: 

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ghazal#:~:text=A%20ghazal%20commonly%20consists%20of,those%20of%20the%20Petrarchan%20sonnet.

  

I played with it a bit and this is the result.

  

Mileage 

Ann Chiappetta

  

rain blows east

wind pushes east

  

chalet slopes west

high rise     faces east

  

90° of north 

Going home is east

  

The dog star howls

summer bright in the east

distance dilutes Love   

>From west  to east

  

Ann, said the loved boy 

Return to me

I wept in the west

and faced east

  

  

2023

  

  

  

  

Ann Chiappetta, MS

President, Friends In Art, Inc.

president at friendsinart.org  www.friendsinart.org 

914.393.6605 

www.annchiappetta.com

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